Wednesday, February 2, 2011

FLASH FICTION FRIDAY, CYCLE 16: ONE, TWO, THREE...

This time the prompt was a starter sentence. “I stepped out into the frigid cold, instinctively I cowered into the depths of my heavy coat, shoving bare hands deep into its pockets.” The word length was to be under 1500 words and the topic was Possession. Having things that belong to us is important, but is it possible to give that too high a priority in our lives?

ONE, TWO, THREE…

I stepped out into the frigid cold, instinctively I cowered into the depths of my heavy coat, shoving bare hands deep into its pockets. I couldn’t remember if I wiped down with my sleeve whatever I had touched, but there couldn’t have been that much. After all, I was only inside a minute or two. I was sure no one saw me, especially with this near-blizzard snowfall going on. Most people are safe and warm at home on this dreadful night. I would have been too if the evil man hadn’t taken it from me. It was supposed to be mine. I needed it to be mine. But, he wouldn’t give it up, so I took it. And now it is. Mine. It wasn’t my fault, but I’m sure you know that. If he had just given to me what was rightfully mine, I wouldn’t have had to follow him home to confront him about it. He kept trying to push me back outside and saying he was going to call the police and have me arrested. Arrested? Me? For what? Taking what was meant to be mine to begin with? No. I tried to reason with him, but he wouldn’t listen. He pushed me really hard against the wall by the door, and so I hit him in the head with the ashtray on the small table by his front door three---one, two, three times. It was all his fault though, but I’m sure you know that. When I got back to my flat, I took one last peek over my shoulder, but I hadn’t been followed. I took it from my pants pocket, where it had been brought safely to its new home, and I placed it with the other two. Then, they were three---one, two, three.

I should be calmer now, but I am not certain how to work my way through the events of today. All should have been complete this evening, but the evil man almost ruined everything. When I went out to the grocery this morning and I passed the novelty shop on the corner, I saw them and knew they had to be mine. One was red, one was blue and one was green. I went into the shop and I asked the man behind the counter how much he wanted for them all. There were three---one, two three of them, you see. He told me they were the last of their kind and once he sold them, there would be no more. He wanted $10 for the whole set because he told me that they play a little tune when you use them. I told him I didn’t care about any little tune. I just needed to have them all, but I didn’t have all of the $10. I asked the man if I could get two of them and come back this evening for the other and he said that would be fine. I was so excited. I took the red one and the blue one home and put them on a stand I made for them and it was so sad because there was one empty place. But not for long.

It had already begun to snow, but I needed to get the rest of the $10, so I locked up my flat with all three---one, two, three locks because you just never knew about people. My landlady is the only one I ever allow in my flat to see all my sets, and she promised she wouldn’t tell anyone that I had them. They are all such beautiful and perfect things. Three---one, two, three in all of them. I have china dolls, I have pens and pencils, I have mugs, I have drinking glasses (although I would never drink out of them), and so many others. All the same---all the last of their kind---all sets of three---one, two, three---all mine. And one empty space. So sad.

By the time I got outside, it was already hard to see with the snow coming down so heavily. Even though it was so cold, I decided to walk to the train station to get the rest of the money that I needed. The train station was a long walk for me, but I was certain I would be able to get the rest of the money I needed there, especially today. When the weather was bad, a lot more people were in the train station and they were all in such a hurry and not calm and it was easy for me to get some money. Sometimes people would just give me money if I asked them for it after I explained that I needed it to complete a set of three---one, two, three. Other times though, I had to take it from them because I needed it to complete my sets and they didn’t. When I got there this time, there was so many people, and they were all in such a hurry and running around. No one was being very nice and I didn’t want to take the time to explain why I needed it, so I decided to just take it. There was a woman on Track 9 standing by herself talking on one of those phones you can take out of your house and still talk. I walked up behind her, pulled her purse off her arm and stabbed her three---one, two, three times with the nice sharp knife I take with me when I go out because you just never know about people. When you do it from behind them, you don’t get any of their blood on your clothes, which is a good thing because then you’d have to take your coat off before you could go anywhere else, and I couldn’t do that. I only had three---one, two, three coats on and there was no way I could have taken one off, but you already knew that. I pushed her down onto the tracks and no one even noticed. People never do when they are in such a hurry and running around.

I took her wallet and dropped her purse onto the tracks and went outside and saw that there would be enough money for me to get it. I practically ran to the novelty shop and I was ready to get it so I could complete my set, but the evil man was in there and he already had it in his hand. I told him he couldn’t have it and that it belonged to me and that the man behind the counter said he would keep it just for me. But they both laughed at me, and the man behind the counter said whoever had the money could buy whatever he had. I told him it wasn’t right. I told him I already had the other two and now I had the money to get number three---one, two, three and he couldn’t let someone else take it. The evil man told me he had already paid for it and I couldn’t have it and put it in his pocket and walked out of the store. The man behind the counter came around to where I was standing and told me to get out of his store and not to bother him anymore. I stabbed him three---one, two, three times with the same knife I stabbed the woman at the train station, but it wasn’t my fault, but you already know that. I got some blood on me that time, but it was snowing so hard, you couldn‘t really see it. Besides, I had to go after the evil man. He still had it.

I saw him walking and that was good because I always walk. He turned down the next street and went up to one of the houses and I was right behind him. After he unlocked the door and started to go inside, I went in right after him. You already know what happened after I went in, but it wasn’t my fault, but you already knew that.

The longer the green one is where it belongs with the other two, the calmer I am beginning to feel. All is never right with the world until there are three---one, two, three. I am truly enjoying looking at my new yo-yo’s. I wonder if someone else will be taking over the novelty shop soon. I didn’t have to wait too long after the last time this happened…

12 comments:

  1. Tremendous story with a great narration running throughout. I was dying to know what the hell was being collected, and almost thought you were not going to tell. So glad you did. Excellent work Joyce, as always!

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  2. Great piece Joyce! I could not at all guess what it was he was collecting, though I was afraid it might be fingers or something... Really like how this shows that sometimes it's the really simple things that drive some over the edge of "must have"...

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  3. Joyce what you do here brilliantly is build up the tension through a series of disorientations, giving information that doesn't make full sense in the context, so the reader wants to keep reading. And then you deliver it exactly along the lines you were prompted, great story.

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  4. Totally pulled me in and held me tight, so much that I'll be careful around someone suffering from Obsessive-compulsive disorder.

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  5. You do crazy very well, Joyce. I got sort of a Gollum feeling from this guy, only worse.

    Great piece of writing, as usual!

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  6. Joyce – how wonderfully you get inside the mind of this character and invite your readers into his/her own particular brand of insanity! I loved the repetition – one, two, three – underlining the compulsive behaviour. Well done, ma’am!!

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  7. Sean, Thank you so much for your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed my story. I held back on what he was after to try to emphasize how driven he was over something so trivial. Not for him though, it was worth killing for, but therein lies the compulsion. One man's trash... and all that.

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  8. Ingrid, Thanks. I'm so glad you liked this. That was what I was after. Trying to show that what's critical to one may mean absolutely nothing to another. To be a true collector of anything, does one have to be a little mad? I wonder.

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  9. Richard, Thanks so much for your comments. I tried to unfold his obsession slowly to show just how dangerous compulsions have the potential to become. I'm glad I succeeded.

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  10. Beach, I'm glad you enjoyed my little tale. OCD can cross the line into madness without a lot of effort, I think. I know people with varying degrees of this condition and I have to tell you, I make sure I don't make any sudden moves around them. Some of them count, some repeatedly check the same things nine or ten times in a row. They pretty much are able to function in the world, but I'm really not sure I understand how. It's definitely a minute-to-minute struggle.

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  11. Flannery, 'You do crazy very well, Joyce.' Thanks?

    I very much appreciate the Gollum reference. I believe my guy took OCD to places thus far uncharted. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I really had a blast writing this one. Although, maybe I shouldn't have just said that...

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  12. Sue, So glad you liked this little peek into the face of madness. I know people who count after saying any number (they truly scare me) and I thought it would add to the creepiness of my character. It seems to have worked!

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